"Tea's Done."


After starting over multiplies times on my Five Magic Spindles retelling and scowling at all the word documents that just didn't feel right, I finally settled on a story line that I feel good about. It didn't come easy. It's like that quote by Ernest Hemingway: "There is no rule on how to write. Sometimes it comes easily and perfectly; sometimes it's like drilling rock and then blasting it out with charges." Yup. I finished the first draft yesterday afternoon which means I'll be diving back into Resist now that it's done. Part of the fun with this fairy tale retelling is getting to read snippets from other writer's projects. Esther of The Pen of a Ready Writer has been posting intriguing snippets for a while now, and there's just something so nice about connecting with other contest writers and encouraging each other in our own unique retellings. The writing community is so great! Since I've been loving to read the snippets people post, I decided to share some of mine from Beneath the Spindle.

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His eyes quickly tore away from the words and settled on her. “Greta, who is the one protecting you, feeding you, making sure you have a roof over your head?”
“You, Franz.”

“That’s right. I am the patriarch of this family, am I not?”
“Yes, Franz.”
“Then trust me when I say you don’t need to burden yourself with this news, all right?” He stared at her intensely.
She nodded her head compliantly. “Yes, Franz.”
“Good.” He returned to his paper, running his thumb nail across his lips with a cigarette between his fingers as he continued reading.


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“What’s wrong now, Greta?” He unrolled his sleeves from his elbow, buttoning the cuffs.
“You don’t have to babysit me.”
He laughed. “Is that what you think I’m doing?”
“Aren’t you?”
“You’re not exactly a baby anymore.”
“Aren’t I? That’s what you and Franz seem to think.”



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"Good. Now, off to bed, Greta.” He nodded his head toward the staircase. When she didn’t move, he leaned in. “Now.”

She released Dimitri’s hand from under the table, and pushed back her chair. “Goodnight, Franz. Goodnight, Dimitri.” Her eyes met with Dimitri's and he offered her a reassuring grin.


***

      “I’m not crying.” She looked away, feeling it bottle up insider her, threatening to burst.
“Just have a little something in your eye, huh?”


***

He leaned forward slowly, his face getting closer with each heartbeat. The moment was broken as the tea kettle began to whistle for their attention. Dimitri pulled back, smirking sheepishly. “Tea’s done.”
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Are you entering the Five Magic Spindles writing contest? If so, I'd love to read some of your snippets!


-Emily



P.S. I shall be back sometime soon with a WWII veteran interview ... I meant to transcribe it last week but then my story was like, "NO! PICK ME!" Yeah, it's rather annoying at times.


16 comments

  1. Wow!
    Sleeping Beauty is one of my all time favorite fairy tales, and I want to enter the Five Magic Spindles contest so badly. I had an idea for it not too long ago, but I just can't get the words out on paper yet...
    I love reading other writers' snippets. They always inspire me and make me itch to write.
    Good luck on edits. I hope you win, because I'm sort of hooked now :)

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    1. Sometimes it's so hard to start a story! I feel ya! I love reading other people's snippets, too! They always inspire me!

      Thank you so much, Hannah! =)

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  2. Wow, Emily! Your snippets are amazing! I'm thinking you'll win for sure!

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    1. Awww thank you so much!! I'm sure that you're going to win ... I love each and every one of your snippets!! =)

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  3. I had one false start with mine, but now I'm 9,000 words into my second idea. I think spending so much time with the Sleeping Beauty idea is what continually spawns all the 'but what if's' and enticing re-telling distractions, so I just have to remember to stay focused on this one. Though it's kind of slowed down right now, as my plot is starting to greatly confuse me, argh.

    You're right though, it's so exciting to hear about all these different Sleeping Beauty ideas.
    And I love all your snippets, especially that last one :)

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    1. I know what you mean ... I tend to overthink the Sleep Beauty thing and have too many ideas as well. It's good that you found an idea and are sticking with it! And that's awesome that you're 9,000 words into it already!! Good luck with it!

      Thanks for commenting, Mary! =)

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  4. It's making me curious! Looking forward to hearing more! :) And that quote at the start - it's so true...

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  5. Fantastic and intriguing Emily! Congrats on finishing the first draft!

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  6. Oh my gosh! This is fabulous! I do hope you win a place in the competition, because I dearly want to read all of this story!

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  7. I want more now!! I'm curious about it!

    I am going to try and enter. I kind of have an idea, but since it is a WWII idea, and my Beauty and the Beast was WWII, I'm not sure if I should go with it or think up a new idea.

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    1. Thanks so much, Jack! =)

      Yeah, I can't seem to stay away from WWII either ... everything I write has been war related, including this retelling! That would so cool if you wrote a WWII retelling, too!

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  8. I meant to comment on this a long time ago. But basically ... I LOVE THIS. I really hope you win because this story needs to be published and we need to read it!

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